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All Your Secret Wishes



Summary: Destiny is a funny thing. When it brought Jared Padalecki into his life, Jensen Ackles thought he was gaining a stepson; he never thought what it would truly bring him. Jared has known since he was sixteen that he would have no other alpha but Jensen. Now, at eighteen, he's wishing that Jensen would love him back the same way. An event occurs that changes everything and forces Jensen to reexamine his true feelings for Jared. As their relationship evolves from stepfather and stepson to true mates, they need each other's strength to face what challenges come next.

Author Notes: Written for the spn big bang. This is something I never thought I would write, I blame tumblr and those I follow for putting these ideas in my head. I never meant to write this story I had a very different idea but this is one that would not be denied and after several re-writes, I am happy with how it turned out.

Beta by: theatregirl7299 with edit suggestions by stolen_voices and lysanatt
I ended up working with the wonderful stolen_voices for art, who pulled double duty and looked over my story. Check out their amazing art here and leave them so love

Disclaimer: This is a work of fiction, none of this is real. I also do not own Heart by Heart by Demi Lovato or Paroles Hymne à L'amour by Edith Piaf

Warnings: NC-17, Alpha Jensen, Omega Jared, Jared in panties, Bottom Jared, Top Jensen, attempted sexual assault (not J2), brief Jensen/Others, one-sided Stephen/Jared

Pairings: J2, JDM/Chad/Chris, brief Jensen/OFC, brief Jensen/Justin

AO3

Chapter 1, Chapter 2, Chapter 3, Chapter 4, Chapter 5, Chapter 6, Chapter 7, Chapter 8, Chapter 9a, Chapter 9b, Chapter 10, Chapter 11, Chapter 12, Chapter 13, Chapter 14, Chapter 15, Chapter 16, Chapter 17

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bewitchedjc
Nov. 10th, 2016 10:52 pm (UTC)
GREAT STORY
You have great story idea; You describe sex scenes well; You do have to work on your dialogue; You tend to add to much and tells us things that reader can surmize; You have to make dialogue more to character; Example; Chapter 9;“You have no right to show back up in my life and dangle knowledge about my father as a way to get me to do what you want. You used me to get your hands on Jensen’s money! Why do you think I would want anything to do with you again? If I want to speak to you I will get in touch with you. If my father really wants to meet me tell him to get in contact with Jensen Ackles. Until then leave me alone.” Jared turned on his heel and left Amanda behind; he was done being her pawn.
you could have jsut wronte "You have no right to show back up in my life...Why do you think would want anything from you; you can have Amanada say "your father wants to speak to you. YOu can have inner dialogue in which jared thinksYou used me to get your hands on Jensen’s money!; You can describe his feeling and then have him cry or stand tall and walk away and say "If my father really wants to meet me tell him to get in contact with Jensen Ackles. Until then leave me alone.”
Other lines throughout story need to limit what you have then say and do more inner monologue and rest with just your great story; the reader can surmize what they thinklike showing back up in my Jared'
s life to dangle knowledge of his father. You have it in story , just leave it to use to read and detect;

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